Sunday, October 28, 2012

Six Sentence Sunday #27



Off-camera from today’s excerpt, Neal has performed a song he wrote for Sandy and Sophie’s wedding [Sandy is a guy]. He’s made a couple mistakes as he played his acoustic guitar Lucita but has recovered. He goes back to his seat beside April, complaining that he messed up, and April soothes him with a kiss. The ceremony continues.
For context, Neal had a one-night-stand with Sophie that he can’t quite forget, and being here at a wedding reminds him of his first love Laurie, who died before he told her exactly how he felt; both things combine to make him a bit morose. He cares a lot for April but leaving the past behind is not his strong point.
Sandy previously commented to Neal that it finally sank in how different things would be once he was married, and Neal told him not much would change. The whole scene is in Neal's POV.
Sophie said her vows first. There went his last chance. Neal sighed silently. She wouldn’t break those promises. Sophie slid the ring onto Sandy’s finger. And there went just a bit of friendship. How weird; things did seem different now.
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4 comments:

  1. Good scene, Marcia. Yep, great life philosophy spilling out. Marriage changes everything. From Neal's POV, you've done a wonderful job of conveying the bittersweet in this moment. Good six! :-)

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    1. Thanks. I love this scene because it's such fun to be deeply in Neal's head and personality. At least, now that he's past his gangbanging years :)

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  2. I like the nice clean way you've written this particular snippet. Somehow it makes it easier to connect to his emotions. I can't remember if this has been addressed in earlier snippets, does Sandy know about Neal and Sophie's fling?

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    1. Thanks so much Jess. Yeah Sandy did find out altho that doesn't get mentioned anywhere here, he found out right away but that was a few years earlier. He's *mostly* forgiven Neal.

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