Sunday, January 27, 2013

Six Sentence Sunday #40 !!



The scene I’m using for SSS describes the wedding of Neal’s best friend, Sandy, to Sophie. The entire scene is in Neal’s POV.  During the ceremony Neal had some difficulty trying not to think about the one-night-stand he and Sophie shared. He had a harder time with memories of his first love, Laurie, who died before he said those three little words “I love you.”  

April (and Sandy) grew up in Crescent City, Calif. An important bit of backstory is that although she now lives with Neal in Los Angeles, she still struggles with unrequited feelings for Sandy. For this scene, the ceremony took place on a beach; afterward, Neal and April go for a walk near the water. He’s told her if getting married means a lot to her, he’ll do it. She called that the most lopsided proposal ever, so he got down on one knee and asked if she would marry him. She pushed him over; something less than flattering slipped out of his mouth, as it sometimes does. April told him that even if he meant it as a serious proposal, neither of them is able to think clearly. I skipped the part where Neal asks if she believes that he loves her.

“I believe you, but love isn’t always enough,” she said softly, staring at her feet. “I’m just afraid. I didn’t get anywhere with Sandy, then I married another guy I thought was committed to me and that fell apart. I’ve seen women catch your eye and I’m afraid you’ll get bored with me someday.”

Out on the wide-open beach, in the bright beautiful sunshine, the best response to that was to hold her closer and whisper the truth into her ear. “That’s impossible babe, ’cause I’m crazy on you -- you light my fire -- you’re my soul and inspiration -- I love you, that’s all I know.”

After this bit are just a few more lines. Hope you've enjoyed getting to know these characters a bit.

So this is the last Six Sentence Sunday through the original SSS site. I’ll keep visiting the blogs I bookmarked, because those are some darn good writers and mighty nice people. Because the idea of posting snippets from your WIPs as part of a blog hop is such a great idea, I got together with two other writers to launch Weekend Writing Warriors (also known as WeWriWa). We're a bit different in that we're allowing excerpts of eight sentences. 

        We're also working out details for a launch contest, so keep your eyes on the WeWriWa site for that! 

        I hope I haven’t seen the last of you guys! I do appreciate every visit, whether or not you comment. Hugs to all my fellow writers, and to my readers :D :D

18 comments:

  1. Oh, he finally said it. Yay! A fabulous six! Keep in touch! :)

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    1. :) You bet, Jessica. Your blog has been bookmarked for months. And thank you so much for all your comments. Whether compliments or a suggested change, it's all appreciated.

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  2. You've done a great job capturing his passion in just a few words. Kudos!

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    1. The restriction of just a few sentences is invaluable for forcing me to stick to the important stuff. Without SSS, I would never have learned that lesson. Thanks so much for your support!

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  3. Interesting story; will look forward to more. See you at WeWriWa. :-)

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    1. Welcome Debbie. Hope you enjoy my little blog. I am so jazzed about WeWriWa! Thanks for coming along on the ride.

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  4. "I love you, that’s all I know." Isn't that the very essence of love? Take a leap, a chance, have faith. None of us have a crystal ball. Nice six, Owly! :-)

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    1. Thanks hon. Readers might not realize it but Neal's quoting some songs there. In the original draft he said something similar but it came out corny so this version makes me happy :D

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  5. Aw, what a sweet thing to say! Nice way to end the official SSS. I'll check out your new meme!

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    1. Why thank you, and hope you enjoy our site. It's been such a pleasure meeting writers with a variety of backgrounds and writing interests!

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  6. A beautifully tender scene, written from the heart. This passage alone makes me want to read the book.
    --Kimberly K. Comeau

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    1. Wow Casey, that's high praise! Thank you so much. Mind you, Neal takes a long and winding road to get to this sensitive place. But a straightforward one would be boring :D

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  7. Your snippet is very tender and touching. I've signed up for WeWriWa.

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    1. Fabulous! I'm looking forward to getting to know you and the other participants better. Thanks so much for visiting today.

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  8. That's a lovely way to end SSS and I'm looing forward to following you on WWW. :) It's been great to get to know you.

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    1. Hey Elin, thank you bunches. I'm also looking forward to visiting everybody and seeing fabulous new excerpts! :D

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  9. I just love the end of this snippet so much. You're my soul and inspiration (Without your love, what good am I?)I can totally see this scene in a movie. I just adore your way of writing. Creating a special moment with what you love is what makes it so relatable, yet very unique! So happy we met!

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    1. Sweet of you Dana. I think we're all in for a thrilling ride with WeWriWa. Thanks so much for the compliments. New friends are awesome :)

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