Saturday, March 29, 2014

Weekend Writing Warriors 3/30/14: Don't let a lil ol' demon scare you!



Hello again, peeps! It’s that day of the week again, #8sunday, where the Weekend Writing Warriors get together and post 8 sentences from a work in progress or something already published. If it’s cold in your part of the world, get a steaming mug of your favorite brew and curl up on the sofa with a good blog hop. If it’s warm in your part of the world, send me some, pleeeeez!

Collected excerpts for this story are here. Last week, Devorah had a near miss with an ugly demon. The following day, who should come knocking at her door to find out how she’s feeling, but Kazimir. That close encounter with the demon has Devorah about to back off from agreeing to join Kaz’s group of Crossers. Kaz tries to talk her out of walking away. He speaks first here.
“Devorah, I can teach you some things that will help you be stronger. I told you I’d do everything I could to help you, and I meant it. A lot of knowledge is barred until you pass initiation but there are things you can learn. Think of me as the Dark side’s Yoda.” 

I tried not to laugh but I did. “Just don’t start talking backwards, because I’ve got enough to handle figuring out what Adrael says.” 

“And he’s improved over the years. Will you try it?” 

Those sincere brown eyes might be the death of me.
As a reminder, this story is still in Draft One, tentatively titled Night Shift. It will probably go through several versions by the time I consider it “done” but the basic ideas and character personalities will stay. I’m having a lot of fun with this one, I hope you’re enjoying these excerpts J

10 comments:

  1. Oh, he's very persuasive! Apparently he knows what buttons to push with her. I like that she's having second thoughts, feels very realistic in this fantastic situation. Great excerpt!

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  2. "...might be the death of me." Sounds kind of foreboding.

    I like the touch of Star Wars humor, btw. I just introduced a bit of that into my NaNo 2013. Their character's light joking shows that they are really starting to click. :-)

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  3. "The Dark side's Yoda..." *Snork* :D Yes, you are having fun with this and that is so important because it shines through in the writing.

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  4. I like 'the Dark side's Yoda' also. Someone we can all identify with.

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  5. I still don't get all the rules for when an angel or demon can take a soul, but it sounds as if she's about to find out.

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  6. Confusing for her, I would imagine there is a lot of anxiety over all the rules she'll have to learn once she gets past the initiation. I like the line about the brown eyes.

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  7. Oh the tempting thrill of stepping into the unknown. Love the Yoda reference. It fit perfect.
    The Murders of Polly Frisch

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  8. Let's take bets on what happens next. The winner pays for Kayden's trip in the night. Good eight, Marcia. She's off on the yellow brick road.

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  9. Oh, I almost wished he had teased a little backwards question to her...try it, you will? Ha ha ha! She's gonna take the bait...do it Devorah, do it!!!

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  10. Kazimir sounds like he/she/it will be fun to write. Like Millie, I was waiting for a little tease, "Try it will you?"

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