Saturday, November 16, 2013

Weekend Writing Warriors 11/17/13


Hi peeps :-D This week I’m continuing with my NaNo story Night Shift. The previous excerpt is here. This scene takes place early in the story. The heroine, Devorah (who is also the POV character) is about to meet an angel for the first time. Kazimir is another main character, kind of an anti-hero type. Kaz has recited a short prayer, after which the air shimmers and a figure appears with flowing hair and wearing a long robe. The angel speaks first. 
"Kazimir, it's good to see you." The voice didn't sound male or female though the face looked more male. "Devorah, I'm often known as Ashavan, though humans in your era seem to prefer the name Adrael; you may call me that if you prefer. What questions may I answer for you?"

What do you ask somebody who appears out of thin air and looks like he fell off a Christmas card?

"Ash, you're too fancy for her, tone yourself down,” Kazimir said.

"Oh, please forgive me, I thought you might be more comfortable with familiar imagery." The air shimmered again and the long robe changed to sweat pants and plain t-shirt, both in sky blue. His hair changed to something shorter; he reminded me a bit of Liam Neeson now.

So much for thinking The Twilight Zone was fiction.
The imaginative participants at Weekend Writing Warriors will show you snippets of romances, breakups, fantasy lands, cities on other planets, lands far back in Earth's history and some far in our future. I'm pretty picky about the stuff I read and I've found lots of stories I can't wait to read more of!

Thanks for visiting my blog today, and for all the continuing wonderful comments. They really make my week :-D

17 comments:

  1. I'll admit it. I'm a big fan of anything that bears a passing resemblance to Liam Neeson, (or Gerard Butler :D)

    What I love about reading your different stories is that each premise is so different. Your range as a writer is amazing. I'm jealous. I'm looking forward to reading more of this story. I think you're off to a fantastic start.

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    1. aw Jess, thank you so much. You are so sweet. I really appreciate that. (You're a pretty strong writer yourself!)

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  2. Oh what fun. A most delightful magical eight. Thanks.

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    1. Hey Charmaine :-) It's nice of you to stop by, good to see you!

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  3. "What do you ask somebody who appears out of thin air and looks like he fell off a Christmas card? " Priceless!

    Loving this story, Marcia. And now you've brought Liam into the imagery ~sigh~ lol

    It's all working for me, dear girl! :-)

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    1. lol! Not sure how Liam got into it but couldn't find a reason to take him out :-D Thanks Rees!

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  4. Great imagery! I love the descriptions of the angel. Christmas card beautiful to Liam Neeson-- love both. And of course the Twilight Zones is real. lol Great 8!

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    1. Hi Karen. Thank you so much. I'm definitely having fun with this!

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  5. Marcia, this is so much fun! "You're too fancy for her, tone yourself down." Love that he's in sky blue sweats : ) Made me smile this morning...pre-coffee!

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    1. Millie :-) I'm so glad I made you smile, that's what it's all about.

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  6. "Fell off a Christmas card" - loved it! and Liam Neeson...ok, if I wasn't hooked before, I am now LOL. Really a wonderful excerpt!

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    1. Thanks so much! I don't know where some of this stuff comes from but I'm just gonna run with it.

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  7. The twilight zone indeed...great 8, I want to know much more!

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  8. I LOVED the Christmas card comparison. It made me laugh,a nd it's exactly what I would be thinking in her shoes. Great eight!

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  9. Or maybe a treetop ornament? I want to see where this is going!

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  10. Fun snippet! What a great imagination you have!

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  11. I wasn't expecting a change of physical appearance like this, nice pplay!

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