Sunday, November 25, 2012

Six Sentence Sunday #31

The scene I’m using for SSS describes the wedding of Neal’s best friend, Sandy, to Sophie. The entire scene is in Neal’s POV. It takes place under a tent on the beach at Crescent City, California, Sandy’s hometown. During the ceremony Neal had some difficulty trying not to think about the one-night-stand he and Sophie shared. He had a harder time with memories of his first love, Laurie, who died before he said those three little words “I love you.” 

April also grew up in Crescent City and now lives with Neal in Los Angeles. Just before today’s excerpt, the wedding proceedings came to an end and now everybody is about to leave the tent. Neal suggests to April that they go for a walk along the beach. She’s taken off her sandals for the walk. Neal thinks about how content he is with his relationship with April; they live together but have never discussed marriage. He also thinks about the enemies he makes by working with a non-profit foundation, going into neighborhoods with active street gangs and trying to convince kids to turn away from gangs. 

“Maybe I’m not being fair to you,” he said as he stuffed both hands into his pockets.

She frowned at him, shading her eyes with a hand, and asked, “What are you talking about?”

“Well, I don’t want to leave you alone if something happens to me. I asked Sandy to take care of you if I couldn’t, but that was before Sophie.” 

She threw her shoes down, which sent up a puff of sand. “Neal Rodriguez, how dare you say that!”

 Half the fun of SSS is seeing comments on excerpts of your own work, but the other fun part is seeing the other snippets. There’s a fair amount of romance in the excerpts though several are not typical at all! There’s really something to please every reading taste.

Thank you for stopping by my blog today. Comments are gratefully accepted. There’s cider, tea, and pumpkin pie for guests J 


  1. Oh dear, what a mood breaker :) very nice six.

  2. Oh, don't think of what could happen. They need to enjoy this moment together. Nice six! :)

    1. Neal's problem is that sometimes his mouth engages before his brain :D Thanks for coming by Jessica.

  3. Yeah, I have to agree with Elin. What a mood breaker. Neal has a skewed concept of women. But, you can see that he's struggling to not be the person he was growing up in the gang. I like it, Marcia. It shows the volatility of his relationship with April. Good six. :-)