Sunday, November 4, 2012

Six Sentence Sunday #28

Past the half-way point of Sandy and Sophie’s wedding ceremony, Neal reflects on his first love, Laurie, who died some years ago. Laurie was one of Sophie’s best friends. The excerpt is in Neal’s POV.
Sandy’s voice rang out clear as a Rickenbacker as he recited his vows. Gulls laughed to each other as they wheeled somewhere overhead, hidden by the tent roof.
Laurie would’ve loved all of this, the excitement, the beauty, the romance, the chance to see Sophie really happy…fuck.
Neal stuffed his hands into his pockets. If he’d have asked anybody to marry him, it would’ve been her, but he’d never even told her that he loved her. He blinked at the tent roof.
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  1. Aww, poor Neal. He's been though alot. It's nice that you've given this group of characters such a close bond and long history.

  2. So many regrets. A fabulous six! :-)

  3. Jess and Jessica, thanks very much. I enjoy exploring each character's psyche. I continually get surprised :)

  4. So sad....I like the description of the gulls laughing to each other. Great stuff.

    1. Thanks Cindy. The scene does have a bit of a depressing overtone, but Neal's life also has a lot of happiness.