I'm picking up with my NaNo story (working title Night Shift) directly from two weeks ago since I got so many requests to continue from where that one ended. It's pretty cool that you guys are enjoying this! Collected excerpts for this story are here.
Left out of the post two weeks ago is the mention of a tangle of black, writhing shadows on the floor. They have a human shape, roughly. They are inside a circle drawn on the floor, along with Kazimir who is now in his demon form. BTW, the story is told from Devorah's point of view. I'm posting six sentences again because I don't want spoilers!
A loud humming filled the room. Unable to even move my hands to cover my ears, I grimaced as the high-pitched sound drove into my brain. One of the writhing shadows slipped free to ooze across the floor. Vaguely human-shaped, it covered something round and glowing in the middle of the circle. Kazimir let out a roar at the same instant that a large shadow dropped into the center of the circle. The humming quit with a snap.
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Scary eight, Marcia. Enough to make my hair stand straight up!
ReplyDeleteYou do such a good job writing action scenes, Marcia. Very smooth-- easy to follow the scene. :-)
ReplyDeleteNone of this sounds especially good for Devorah!
ReplyDeletePowerful and strange- just my cup of tea! Great snippet.
ReplyDeleteOh no! Powerful snippet, scary!
ReplyDeleteI don't like those shadows. (gut feeling, you've done a good job of writing them.)
ReplyDeleteGreat imagery, Marcia!
ReplyDeleteThe shadows are very ominous, well written details on them for sure! Such an interesting story - I'm glad you're continuing to share it with us (altho I do wonder how the characters in the other novel are doing without us LOL). Excellent excerpt!
ReplyDeleteThe painful sound, that escaping shadow... I sense something really bad is coming. It's probably too late for her to do anything about it, though. o_O
ReplyDeleteDefinitely and effectively builds a lot of tension here. Those shadows are scary indeed.
ReplyDeleteWhat the hell dropped into the center of the circle???? Oh crap...I gotta know. Marcia, you tease! Happy Momma's Day, Miss Mousie is adorable : )
ReplyDeleteThanks so much, everybody :) Your comments make my day. I love seeing readers' thoughts like this. It helps me whether you point out something that you particularly enjoy, or something you think doesn't sound right. I want to keep doing what you like and improve what you don't :)
ReplyDeleteVeronica, Neal and the boys are never far from my mind. While I'm going to keep working on Night Shift, at some point Street Glass will be back on my blog. I think of that story as a fine wine; I must not rush it!