Saturday, January 25, 2014

Weekend Writing Warriors 1/26/14



Staying with the scene I’ve been posting from the last couple of weeks, Kazimir provoked Devorah into shooting him. As soon as she does, he drops his demon illusion. Horrified at what she’s done and not sure if she wants Kaz to live or die, Devorah calls the angel Adrael. Adrael finds Kaz unconscious, shot in the thigh. She questions if he deserves to die after taking the rabbi’s soul to the demons. Adrael tries to explain the larger issues going on; he speaks first. 

“Rabbi Abbatoy did his best to guide his congregation to the truth as Judaism sees it, while Kazimir and his Crosser friends have been able to help weaken the Dark across all boundaries. So, while neither man is more important or more holy or more deserving than the other, one was a servant of a single aspect of the Light and the other is a servant of the Light in all its complexity. That is the best answer I can give.”

“So it kind of comes down to numbers, Kazimir can help more people, is that it?”  

“That is one way to think of it. Good and evil, as humans understand them, are not clear-cut and linear--there are very many shades of grey.”

“I was taught there’s a difference between right and wrong--both Judaism and Christianity say so.”  

“And there is such a difference. Sometimes, however, it’s one of those shades of grey.”

(Collected excerpts from this story are here.

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20 comments:

  1. Nice. Tackling some BIG questions...big concepts. I'm liking this story, Marcia. :-)

    One observation: "That is..." He says it a couple of times. Is that just the way he speaks--and he'll do that through the whole book? Sometimes a contraction sounds smoother. I often find myself writing it out, rather then contracting them, and then have to change them to remove that stilted feel from my writing. :-) But, if that's the way he talks, then forget I said anything. :-)

    Good 8!

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    1. Hi Rees. Yeah, Adrael talks like that, and worse, frankly :) It's part of his personality. He arrived in my head like that, which I find fascinating because I've never had a character before who is so purposely wordy! :-)

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  2. You definitely make the reader THINK. Great snippet.

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    1. Hey Chelle. Thanks so much. Nice to see you.

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  3. Yes, sometimes right and wrong just depends on where you stand. Great snippet!

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    1. Exactly. Thanks for coming by, Linda!

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  4. You have this reader deep in thought. Shades of grey? Definitely as in real life a shade to far may be what's going on here. Thanks, Marcia.

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    1. Cool. That's what I like to hear :-) Nice to see you, Charmaine.

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  5. The whole shades of gray concept is so hard to grapple with - kudos to you for tackling the issues. A fascinating excerpt...thought provoking, as Char said.

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    1. Hey Veronica. Thanks so much. It's thought provoking for me as well, as I watch what my fingers type. "Oh that's a deep concept, hey who's writing this, you or me?" lol!

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  6. A very complex eight sentences. I like it! That is really pulling the reader in by making them think of their own personal convictions. Well done Marcia!

    (I'm here, got an error when I tried to add to the WWW list.)
    The Murders of Polly Frisch

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    1. Hi Cindy. Thanks hon. I like stories that make me think, I'm guessing other folks do too.

      Hope you get bunches of visitors this week, because Polly's story is fascinating and the way you tell it is riveting!

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  7. I wish the shades of gray concept were better appreciated in Congress.

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    1. lol! Hiya, Sue Ann. I agree with you on that!

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  8. Oh boy...this is tough. The needs of the many outweighing the needs of the one, but if that one is your friend...nice job (last week as well, I went back to read it).

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    1. Well thanks Millie, I really appreciate your comment :-) Always nice to see you.

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  9. This is very interesting- I love reading about angels and demons. Do you have a title yet?

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  10. Shades of grey abound. :) Quite a dilemma! Interesting story, Marcia.

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  11. Yesterdays wrong can become todays right and vice a versa of course.

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