Saturday, December 21, 2013

Weekend Writing Warriors 12/22/13

Happy Solstice, all! For those of us in the Northern Hemisphere, the days are now getting longer :D :D And Merry Christmas.

You can find previous excerpts here. Last Sunday, in my excerpt from Night Shift, I left you wondering what terrible thing Kazimir was going to tell Devorah. Background: Devorah comes from a mixed Jewish/Catholic family. While she's not devoutly Jewish or Catholic, she does consider Rabbi Abbatoy and Father John to be close friends. She's just come from a discussion with the rabbi about sacrifice, personal responsibility, and the greater good. On her way to talk to Kazimir, she finds him badly beat up. He tells her the demons attacked him.

This excerpt is condensed quite a bit and makes use of creative punctuation :) Kazimir speaks first.
"Because I couldn't let the demons kill me or drag me to hell, I had to promise to do something if they let me live. Understand, you don't promise something to a lieutenant of the Dark and renege, and get away with it." His shoulders were hunched against more than the cool breeze. "It wasn't my idea but I couldn't--ah fuck, I'm making excuses--I promised to bring them a soul."  
I wanted to believe this bothered him, but whose soul did he mean? "Don't you dare touch my brother!"
Kazimir raised his hands defensively and said, "Not your family, a friend, I'm sorry."   
"Damn you, stop jerking me around and just tell me!"   
"Rabbi Abbatoy."  
Be sure to visit the Weekend Writing Warriors homepage for snippets from some pretty cool writers. I'm pretty picky about what I read and I've found several stories I can't wait to see more of every week. We range from lighthearted and romantic to sci fi and historical. It's like being in a library, only better, cause you get to interact with the authors!

25 comments:

  1. I wonder if he is really going to go through with it now that he had told her the truth.

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    1. Hi Linda. That's an interesting question you raise ;-)

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  2. Abbatoy makes me think attaboy...This has me wondering what the heck is going to happen, and how does he get the soul? Does he have to corrupt him or just kill him? It may not be as easy as he thinks, if the Rabbi has God on his side...hmmm...And, Merry Christmas and a happy winter solstice too : )

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    1. *laff* I'm not real happy with that name myself, it's the first one that popped into my head. First draft, so it's subject to change. I guess you'll have to come back to find out!

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    2. First drafts are just to get that info out of your head…always okay to make name changes. I'm thinking of changing a few from my WIP as well.

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  3. I always enjoy how you create characters with such interesting cultural backgrounds. Not only are they interesting, but it also gives me a chance to educate myself at the same time. I'm very curious to see which direction you take this story,

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    1. Hey Jess! Thanks so much. It's a learning process for me too. And bunches of fun, or I wouldn't keep at it.

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  4. Excellent! Intense scene, Marcia, and your crisp writing style carries it! Have a merry Christmas. :-)

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    1. Thanks Rees :-) These characters have a different feel from my guys in Street Glass and I'm really liking it. And it's such a relief to let them use cell phones and laptops!

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  5. Intense and gut wrenching...what will they do next! Great 8!

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    1. Thanks very much. I'll continue with this scene next time, so I hope you'll be back.

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  6. I have a feeling delivering the soul of a rabbi won't be easy...making a deal with the Dark never turns out well either. Fascinating excerpt!

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    1. Well, you never know. Kazimir has been a demon for a long time. It's great to see you, Veronica.

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  7. Delivering a soul to order? Has he ever read the Screwtape Letters?

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    1. Probably not, Sue Ann. I don't think he wants to read about demons in his rare leisure time after putting up with them 24/7!

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  8. Doesn't that assignment rather require the cooperation of the soul in question? Could Father John help save Rabbi Abbatoy?

    Would spelling it Abbatoi help at all I wonder?

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    1. Hey, that spelling might work, thanks bunches for that :)

      It doesn't require cooperation. It's basically soul stealing.

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    1. Thanks! Hope to see you again, Cara.

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  10. Really like how Devorah comes across in this excerpt. Maybe she'll be able to save the day?

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    1. Thanks Eleri :) She's definitely not a wimp. Save the day, well, where's the fun in that!

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  11. Oh boy, that's not going to sit well. Wonder how they are going to get through this one. Good 8.

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    1. Hi Chelle. It's one thing after another for this poor woman. But that's the point, isn't it! :D

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