Here, I pick up a few lines after last week's snippet. Devorah is the POV character. Creative sentence structure is in use!
Kazimir kissed my forehead then scrambled to his feet; he hung his head and shuffled several steps away.Wouldn't you like to know!
Now what? "I thought you were happy."
"Well, I was, but I'm about to make you majorly pissed and I'm not happy about that."
I huffed a sigh in exasperation and asked, "What are you talking about?"
He stopped, facing away from me. His hair hung in a ponytail halfway down his back; I hadn't realized it was that long. Stuffing both hands into his jeans pockets, he turned back toward me looking so broken up I thought he might cry. What in the world could be so awful?
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Um hello, cliffhanger!!! I'm thoroughly intrigued and NEED to know what he's about to reveal...love the detail about his hair. Great snippet!
ReplyDeleteSomething about her father's death, I bet.
ReplyDelete@Sue Ann Bowling
ReplyDeleteHi Sue Ann. Well, maybe, and maybe not :)
@Veronica Scott
ReplyDelete:D Hey hi. I'm so glad you like these bits, Veronica!
Yes, I want to know! lol
ReplyDelete@Karen Michelle Nutt
ReplyDeleteCome by next week, there might be an explanation :)
Definitely want to know what he feels so "guilty" about.
ReplyDelete@Chelle Cordero
ReplyDeleteHey Chelle. I'm glad I've got you curious!
Ok, that stinks. First it looks like everything is going great and now he has to go and confess something? Or share bad news, or whatever that is obviously a total mood killer. No fair! Well done, Marcia!
ReplyDelete@Kate Warren
ReplyDeleteThanks Kate. Will we find out what's eating at him??