Saturday, August 17, 2013

Weekend Writing Warriors 8/18/13

Street Glass is my novel-in-progress. My tagline: Underprivileged 18-yr-old Latino leaves street gang and befriends white, over-privileged musicians.

While some of the plot is subject to change (draft two is a pretty early draft, after all) the basic elements will stay, as will the character "voices." So these excerpts will still give you a good idea of how the plot plays out and what the characters are like. The year is 1986, in Los Angeles, California.

Skipping ahead a little. For this excerpt, Neal and Lennie have gone out for a while and return to the band’s mansion after nightfall. They come into the room Sandy’s been watching TV in. Sandy is the first speaker here, and the snippet is in his POV.
“Neal, you look pissed, what’s up?”

“Saw a car behind us a couple times. Don’t trust it.” Neal started toward the picture window.

Before he got there, a series of rapid cracks sounded from outside, almost like a sped-up roll on a snare drum but at a lower pitch.

The entire window exploded and Neal hit the floor with hands covering his head.

Glass flew everywhere.
Tag along at Weekend Writing Warriors as we blog hop all over the world, reading fabulous snippets from works in progress, works just published and some just about to be. You'll find various genres and blends of genres. Believe me, our participating writers have full and active imaginations!

Thanks for visiting my blog today. Comments gratefully accepted :-D

25 comments:

  1. Oh no, it looks like the gang find them. :(

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  2. Whoa! Nice depiction of the window exploding. I hope they'll be okay!

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    1. Thanks. Hope to see you next time, to find out what happens ;)

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  3. Yikes; the gang found Neil! Hair raising excerpt and I will definitely have to read the rest when I get back in October. Such a good story, Marcia. :-)

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  4. heehee! Thanks. I'll keep the snippets collected so you can catch up. Always enjoy seeing you stop by.

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  5. You've captured a time and place very well. Good eight.

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  6. Oh wow, I've been wondering if trouble was going to follow him. It's not that easy to get out of the gang life, so this snippet was highly believable for sure. Great job!

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    1. Hi Veronica. I guess for *some* people in real life it's not too hard, but that makes for boring fiction :D

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  7. I like Sandy's hearing the gunfire as a musical instrument.

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    1. And that just fell into my lap, a true gift! Sometimes pieces come together without any work at all :D :D

      Thanks Sue Ann.

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  8. I didn't expect that. I guess it's really hard to get out of gang life.

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    1. For some people, yeah. Especially if it makes a better story!

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  9. You can leave the gang, but will the gang ever leave you... I hope he can find a peaceful place - lots of potential for character growth and drama in this one - great snippet!

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    1. I've just chased him up the tree, I haven't even started throwing rocks yet, Susan! lol!

      Thanks, I appreciate your comment :)

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  10. This is excellent, Marcia! I like the way you described the sound of the shots using music terms :-) That works perfectly here. :-)

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    1. It really was a gift, I got so lucky with that. :D :D Thanks Rees, nice to see you.

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  11. Great description! Love how you described the sound:)

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  12. Oh My! Exciting, loved your descriptions!

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    1. Thanks! Don't want characters or readers to get complacent. lol!

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  13. You've got me cringing on the floor with my arms over my head too! Good job!

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    1. woot! Love that. Thanks so much Millie.

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  14. A great point to leave us in suspense.

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