Sunday, September 23, 2012

Six Sentence Sunday #22

Hi everybody. Continuing with the scene of Sandy's wedding, which takes place on a California beach. The entire scene is in Neal's POV. The bride (Sophie) has entered the main tent. 

Sophie smiled, and lit up from head to toe. The crowd seemed to hold its collective breath. She glided down the center aisle of the main tent, her flowery perfume brushing Neal as she passed.
That smokin’ body had been his just once, in a coked-up, broken-hearted buzz. His hand convulsed on April’s. He really needed to put that memory in a locked box.

Six Sentence Sunday is a blog hop. You sign up at the SSS site, post six sentences from one of your WIPs on your blog, and go from site to site exploring the variety of writing styles and scenes. SSS attracts some pretty talented writers and it's always so much fun to see how creative everybody is.

Thanks for stopping by my blog today. I really appreciate it.

9 comments:

  1. Yes, she's getting married. Best to put that in the past. Great six! :)

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  2. Ooh, yes, he really needs to do that - but will he?

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  3. That's beautifully done. Wistful, and sad for both Neal and April.

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  4. Thank you.The overall scene does have a sad element for both of them which is why Neal makes some sarcastic observations. Happy characters are less interesting :D

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  5. Interesting six. I sense trouble in the not too distant future on Neal's part.

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  6. I appreciate that, ladies. Staying out of trouble, well, where's the fun in that?

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  7. Wow! Now there's some conflict added to the story! Yikes! :-) Great six, Owly! :-)

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  8. :D

    You should've been there when Sandy found out -- *that* was conflict!

    (that scene is in the novel BTW)

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