Sunday, September 2, 2012

Six Sentence Sunday #19

We're back with more from one of the scenes I wrote because I was in a dry spell for the novel itself. It's not intended to be included in the novel, at least not at this point. This excerpt is an expanded part of the scene here on my blog entitled Sandy and Neal before the wedding (Sandy's wedding to Sophie).

This scene started with Six Sentence Sunday #14. It takes place several years before Neal proposes to April.

In the scene, Sandy and Neal have traveled to Crescent City, California--Sandy's hometown. Sandy gets up early the morning of the ceremony and asks Neal to come with him to the beach so he can "settle his head." Neal brings his guitar, which he's planning to use at the ceremony (unbeknownst to Sandy). He's just started guitar lessons so he's not very good yet.

At this point, the two guys have been friends for 10 or 11 years. They're in a rock band together. They've spent a bit of time on the beach then at the diner, and now we skip right to the beginning of the ceremony, which takes place right on the beach. The excerpt is in Neal's POV.
Neal adjusted his sunglasses as he stood under the white canvas tent roof. The music was turned up against sound of the roof flapping in the brisk breeze. Nice that the wind had kicked up, but with everybody crowded together, it was kind of claustrophobic.

As far as he could tell, there still wasn’t a cloud to be seen. If he ever did decide to get married, it would probably pour all day.

April squeezed his hand.
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  1. I love the insight into his past and how he felt about performing for an audience back then. Great six! :)

  2. Great insight to the character by giving us a glimpse of his past. Good job.

  3. This is nice. He's a bit down on himself, isn't he? But at least he's looking ahead.

  4. Thank you, ladies. Yeah, Neal's a bit disgruntled, but a perpetually happy character just isn't as interesting :D

  5. I like your description and Neal's observations. Nice six. :)