We’re Weekend Writing Warriors, the neat little writers blog hop where authors post eight sentences from a work of theirs, published or not, live on their blog by 9 am US Eastern time Sundays. Then we all hop around to each other’s blogs to cheer on protagonists, boo at antags, worry that lovers may drift apart, hope that potential lovers find each other, and so much more. We have some dedicated writers here!
Continuing with my paranormal novel tentatively titled Night Shift. Collected excerpts for this story are here. Kazimir has explained some of the basics about being a Crosser, saying that while Crossers have permission to do what’s necessary as demons, there is a caveat. I like how this excerpt plays out as is, so I’m leaving it at six sentences.
“The source of the Light--God, the Holy of Holies, the Eternal One--expects you to genuinely regret everything you have to do as a demon. We’ve lost some good Crossers because they couldn’t regret some of the little things and then some of the big things, and then they turned full demon. I’ve been doing this for a long time and I can tell you that while it’s hard to live on this edge, Crossers have something demons don’t--hope. If you realize you’ve gone too far, the Light will accept you back without conditions. The Dark might offer you a second chance but you’ll pay dearly for it.” He wasn’t quite successful at suppressing a shudder.
This guy has more backstory than you can shake a stick at. I like Kaz but I refuse to let him take over ;-) A couple of scenarios have revealed themselves to me in which Kaz and Devorah get separated for extended periods. I like that as it will give me the chance to really focus on Devorah, who is after all the POV character in a first-person-POV story.
Thanks so much for visiting today :-) I love all of your comments.
Wow very nice! I really loved how this section encapsulated the choice that Crossers must have to constantly face: Crossers have something demons don’t--hope. If you realize you’ve gone too far, the Light will accept you back without conditions. The Dark might offer you a second chance but you’ll pay dearly for it.”
ReplyDeleteThanks Elsa. Yeah, Crossers have to be selfless while pretending to be convincingly selfish - not easy at all.
DeleteI really, really like the way this story is going! "...Crossers have something demons don’t--hope." Wonderful! What agony the temptation must be. Good 8, Marcia!
ReplyDeleteThanks Rees! I rewrote this bit as well as last week's! But the rewritten ones do seem better. More succinct. It's challenging to get succinct yet explanatory. But fun!
DeleteI love the philosophy here - what a terrific excerpt!
ReplyDeleteI really appreciate that! That means a lot coming from you :)
DeleteOh this story is great! I'm loving it so much already. First of all I love that you included Christ, second the crossers are ever so interesting. Can't wait to read more.
ReplyDeleteThanks Neva. There sure will be more next week.
DeleteGreat snippet this week. Cant wait to tune in next week.
ReplyDeleteHi Cecilia. Thanks for coming by!
DeleteOh, those poor agonized crossers. Trying to fight for good but having to be a bit evil...hey, Marcia, am I a crosser : )
ReplyDeletehahaha! Well, Millie, maybe. How evil ARE you???
DeleteVery intriguing and involved. That's some great world building right there!
ReplyDeleteI admit I've been on the edge a bit about how I feel about Kaz doing not-so-nice-things, but this snippet really alleviates any doubts I have about him. The fact that crossers need to regret their actions, this reminds me of how my mom would always say "this hurts me more than it hurts you" when I desperately needed discipline. Great world-building - and a perfect snippet to post following the "Day of Atonement", lol.
ReplyDeleteAs Chelle said, timing is all. Gorgeous eight. I thrilled to his words. Your words.
ReplyDeleteCindy, Chelle, and Charmaine, thanks for taking time out of your busy days to visit my blog. :-D I'm learning a lot about this world as I go. I can't sit down and create new worlds through questionnaires and lists. It has to happen organically for me :-)
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