Here we are again, continuing with my NaNo story,
working title Night Shift. Commenters last week seemed pretty interested in Devorah's response to the news that Kazimir is over 400 years old, so I'm picking up from there. This is
still a first draft so a lot is subject to change. Collected excerpts for this
story are here. This snippet has been tweaked to fit WeWriWa's guidelines ;-) My head would not wrap around that; four-hundred-plus years? Really? “Whoa. That’s pretty incredible . . . how does that happen?”
“A gift from the Dark side once I reached a certain level. The Light doesn’t really approve but it’s not one of those things they can interfere with, and now you know.” Kazimir didn’t face me.
“So does that mean you’re actually, like, immortal?” But he looked so normal. I stepped back; he finally turned toward me, and I took one step closer to him.
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excerpts :-D And here’s hoping your Valentine’s weekend is a great one, if you
celebrate! My sister made a heart-shaped red velvet cake with fudgy frosting, to celebrate family love. Any holiday that encourages the giving and eating of chocolate, I'm in! :-D
Yes, how does that happen...I can feel her total incredulity! Nice job. I'm wanting his answer : ) And yes to chocolate, for sure!
ReplyDeleteThanks Millie. It's nice to see you :) I didn't like the original response I had from her and changed it right before posting here, so I'm pleased you like it.
DeleteUm, what to say to your elders. Personally I'm old but not that old. Super good eight. Thanks.
ReplyDeletelol, Charmaine! Thanks so much for coming by.
DeleteThat's quite a thing to hear! Great dialogue.
ReplyDeleteIt sure did come as a surprise to Devorah. I appreciate the compliment :)
DeleteThat would be an awful lot to process:D
ReplyDeleteSure is, especially with all the other stuff going on - because I don't like to go easy on my characters!
DeleteNice, Marcia! I love the drama in "I stepped back...he turned toward me...I took one step closer..." Her uncertainty is right there... good job!
ReplyDeleteImmortal as in immune to death, or just a very long life span? A lot of my characters don't age, but they can be killed.
ReplyDeleteBut he looked so normal, great line.
ReplyDeleteGreat worldbuilding and backstory there.
ReplyDelete" But he looked so normal." THAT line speaks volumes! I think it makes a great connection between Devorah and reader. Perfectly believable thought. :-)
ReplyDeleteGood, crisp dialogue as always, Marcia! I like this story. :-)
Such an interesting story you've got going. I like the twists and turns and this whole development about the immortality and the Light and Dark is intriguing. Great snippet!
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