Saturday, October 19, 2013

Weekend Writing Warriors 10/20/13

Street Glass is my novel-in-progress. My tagline: Underprivileged 18-yr-old Latino leaves street gang and befriends white, over-privileged rock musicians.

While some of the plot is subject to change (draft two is a pretty early draft, after all) the basic elements will stay, as will the character "voices." So these excerpts will still give you a good idea of how the plot plays out and what the characters are like. The year is 1986, in Los Angeles, California.

The previous excerpts are collected here. 

Thanks so much for all your wonderful comments on Phil; they gave me a lot of warm fuzzies J Moving on from that scene, the band’s rehearsal ends and Sandy gives Neal a lift to the mansion. It’s previously been explained that the four guys in the band live in the same house, though they’re not all there all the time. It’s enormous even for a mansion, enough to make Neal’s eyes pop and his breath catch when he first sees it. Inside, the place is full of crystal chandeliers, velvet sofas and chairs, a whole room recreating the band’s favorite club complete with fully stocked bar: you get the idea. Members of the band’s families gather for a send-off party before every tour, and Neal meets a bunch of them. 
Sandy showed up with something pale and bubbly in two fancy-cut glasses and gave one to Neal. “We use crystal and china for these get-togethers so be extra careful. There’s booze around too and I won’t say you shouldn’t have any, but don’t get plastered. You have to stick to limits.”

Neal drank from his crystal glass. Ginger ale? Fuck it. Limits. Yeah right.
The imaginative participants at Weekend Writing Warriors will show you snippets of romances, breakups, fantasy lands, cities on other planets, lands far back in Earth's history and some far in our future. I'm pretty picky about the stuff I read and I've found lots of stories I can't wait to read more of!

Thanks for visiting my blog today, and for all the continuing wonderful comments. They really make my week :-D

21 comments:

  1. LOL, great tease. I thought he was getting booze in his glass not soda.:)

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    1. One of Neal's many illusions to be shattered along the way :-) Not to mention Sandy's! Thanks for visiting.

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  2. Another great 8. Poor Neal is getting quite an education in only a few days! Well done, Owllady!

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    1. Indeedy he is. He does get to turn the tables now and then. Nice to see you.

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  3. Poor Neal - expecting something and sipping ginger ale ... nice!!!! Enjoyable #8 Good job.

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    1. Hi Susan! In my head, he had an interesting expression, too :D :D

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  4. Haha, ginger ale in cut crystal. I love it! I'm wondering how bad the culture shock will be for him once things really get swinging. Great eight!

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    1. He's not too happy to be told about limits by somebody who lives in a mansion full of insanely expensive everything, for starters ... he and Sandy have to figure out a lot of things as the story plays out. Thanks for coming by!

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  5. Neal has lots of learning to do : ) I really love imagining these scenes in my head : )

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    1. Hey Millie. Thanks so much. It's such a pleasure for me to have all these wonderful visitors and comments :D

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  6. Uh oh, I hope Neal can stick to the limits but I have a bad feeling about this party. Very well done snippet!

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    1. Hi Veronica. Well, the question is, will *any* of those guys stick to limits? ;-)

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  7. I like the fact that the glasses are described from Neal's point of view. I think some writers forget, when it's not in dialogue you still need to keep in that same character's POV.

    So the question is, will Neal slip backwards and get drunk or not? I worry for that boy and he's not even real! :)

    History Sleuth's Milk Carton Murders

    (P.S. Thanks for the suggestion!)

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    1. *ahem* He's real, that's what keeps me looking over my shoulder :-D :-D

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    2. oh and you're very welcome!

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  8. Ginger ale in fancy-cut glasses. I love the description. Though, I'd probably be expecting something a little more too. At least the Ginger ale has bubbles! Great snippet.

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    1. Thanks so much Anne. He's disappointed, for sure.

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  9. Lol. I love how Sandy plays Neal here, establishing the rules but asking him to respect them instead of forcing him to. That'll be a nice challenge for Neal.

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    1. Sandy's nice about it here, but he doesn't have a strong sense of limits either, so that makes their friendship interesting :-)

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    1. *lol* Sure are, Sue Ann! Thanks for coming by!

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