While some of the plot is subject to change (draft two is a pretty early draft, after all) the basic elements will stay, as will the character "voices." So these excerpts will still give you a good idea of how the plot plays out and what the characters are like. The year is 1986, in Los Angeles, California.
The previous excerpts are collected here.
Continuing immediately from last week, Phil and Neal
are chatting. Phil gets pretty limited “screen time” in the novel but he’s a
great guy, so I’m focusing on him for just a few excerpts.
He and Neal are at the band’s rehearsal, onstage for a few
minutes while everybody else is busy elsewhere.
Neal speaks first.
The imaginative participants at Weekend Writing Warriors will show you snippets of romances, breakups, fantasy lands, cities on other planets, lands far back in Earth's history and some far in our future. I'm pretty picky about the stuff I read and I've found lots of stories I can't wait to read more of!“Hey, I didn’t think how I was sitting made a difference. Oh fuck,” he laughed.“Now what?” Phil said.“This’s totally loco. Y’know I shot at dudes like you, but you stand there an’ help me. Can’t figure it out.”Phil focused on some spot out in the seats. “The past is the past. My family got chased out of Alabama so I’ve seen enough to know that every day we’re alive, God smiles on us.”
Thanks for visiting my blog today, and for all the continuing wonderful comments. They really make my week :-D
I said it before, and I'm gonna say it again. I really like Phil! Thanks for sharing him with us!!!
ReplyDelete:-D Thanks so much, Millie!
DeleteHe knows what he's talking about. Gotta love Phil. Excellent eight!
ReplyDeleteHow nice of you. Thanks for coming by :-)
DeletePhil is pretty awesome. Great snippet!
ReplyDeleteHi Jess! I really appreciate that :-)
DeletePhil seems like such a great guy. I'm going back through your entries to read more right now. Definitely will be on the lookout for you next weekend!
ReplyDeleteWell hi, Nora! I'm pleased & humbled. Thanks so much.
DeleteAs all the others said - Phil is a keeper. He has learned a lot in his short life ... and obviously they were 'hard' lessons. Great 8!
ReplyDeleteSusan :-D That's really sweet of you. Thanks.
DeleteI think we could all take lessons from Phil. Well done, Owllady!
ReplyDeleteFunny isn't it how some characters just spit things out and you just think, Huh, now why haven't I ever said that myself? lol!
DeletePhil is EXCELLENT. We need more Phil. Neal needs more Phil-advice LOL. Really enjoying this series of snippets!
ReplyDeleteEvidently I have to find a way to bring Phil back into the story :-)
DeleteHe leaves ostensibly for family reasons, but the truth is that life is harder for Neal without Phil around so I moved Phil out 0.0 There is a reason, waaay at the end of the story, for him to come back but then we probably wouldn't see much of him. So I'm continuing to think about that.
Thanks for the uplifting comments, they are so encouraging and wonderful!
I like Phil! Looks like Neal's getting some good exposure...
ReplyDeleteHey Angela :-) He sure is. Phil's absence is something that, well, is noticeable for Neal :-)
DeleteGod, what a great line..y' know I shot at dudes like you..... love the kids blatant honesty. Neal's starting to come around. Excellent 8 as usual!
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lol! Thanks so much! He can be a bit slow but he does catch on :-)
DeletePhil has an ability to learn without being embittered I'd like to see more of.
ReplyDeleteThanks Sue, I'll see what I can do!
DeleteNeal seems to be back on the right track for the moment at least.
ReplyDeleteYes indeed, Linda. Thanks for stopping by.
DeleteI like Phil. He's very wise. Nice snippet!
ReplyDeleteHi Anne. I rather like Phil myself. I appreciate your comment!
DeleteAn interesting response from Phil there.
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