Sunday, July 1, 2012

Six Sentence Sunday #10

Rock musician Neal has finally managed to pop the question to his girlfriend April, onstage in front of several thousand people. He's kind of frozen there on one knee, not really sure of her answer.
April stood there looking toward the other band members, drawing it out, Neal supposed, just to make him crazy. Was this torture really necessary?

She leaned toward him and said, quietly but clear as a bell, “Yes.”

A electric shockwave flashed through him; not the high kind he got while playing, but the kind somebody would get if slapped by a live wire.

Maybe he should sit.

She added, “On one condition.”
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Follow along as underprivileged Latino teenager befriends overprivileged, white musicians, and a lot of lessons are learned on both sides. And help me spot the parts that need to be trashed, the parts that need tightening up, the parts that need to be moved up or down, all that good stuff. Email me through the link in my profile. Know that if you help me sort this thing out, you will be blessed for seven lifetimes :D

Thanks for stopping by today.

If you have any interest in self-publishing, let me direct you to yesterday's guest post by Victorine Lieske. It's the first half of a 2-part post on your book cover and why you need to get it right.


  1. *draws breath* I'm glad she said yes, but what's the condition? Eek! Great six!

  2. lolol! Yay! Go Neal!!! :-) But, what is that one condition?? Great six, Marcia! I'll be back next week :-)

  3. Thanks Jessica and Teresa. We wouldn't want it to be TOO easy, would we!

  4. Tension filled 6! And another cliffhanger!

  5. Ugh! I have a love-hate relationship with cliffhangers. Great six!

  6. Angela and Samantha, nice of you to drop by. Yeah, those cliffhangers: tough on readers, but fun for writers. :D