Sunday, August 17, 2014

Weekend Writing Warriors 8/17/14: I can fix it--don't want anything in return, really

Well well, it looks like the weekend again! In my case a dreary, non-summer weekend but at least we’re not getting the floods or firestorms that others are. Dreary works, though, because that means it’s good weather for staying in and doing the Weekend Writing Warriors blog hop. What’s that? Otherwise known as #8sunday, we pick eight sentences from a work in progress or a published work, sign up on the linky list, then get those 8 on our blogs live by 9 am Eastern time U.S. Pretty simple, huh?

I’m still on the scene I’ve been posting from in my WIP tentatively titled Night Shift. Kazimir has just told Devorah it would be best if she just disappears from her old life. She protests that nobody would believe she disappeared in the synagogue fire and building collapse because there are always remains. Kaz, of course, has an answer for that. 

(Thaumiel is the higher-level demon he fought with and ensnared in the synagogue’s basement. Collected excerpts for this story are here.) 

“But it’s not a normal collapse -- me and Thaumiel made enough noise to be heard. Anybody who got out safely knows something really freaky happened. So if you vanish, it’ll just be another part of the mystery.”  

My jaw dropped. “I can’t do that to my family, Dad died just a couple weeks ago and Mom’s about to lose Joe to the police.”  

“It’s easier in the long run.” He took my hand; despite the light pressure I gasped. “This must be the one you hit me with -- I can fix it.”  

Now he wants to help? Why am I suspicious of his motives? ;-) 

You know, I really enjoy the challenge of picking an impactful excerpt and making it fit into eight sentences. It helps me find things that are unnecessary and helps me decide what I want to focus on in each snippet. It teaches me to look for ways to condense beside simply slapping a bunch of commas in. I’m grateful to the ladies of the dearly departed Six Sentence Sunday for introducing me to the idea. Whatever success we may have, we stand on the shoulders of giants.


  1. So he's a sentimental, family man huh? LOL Great excerpt.

  2. The plot thickens and is so good. What happens next in this cliff hanger?

  3. Heather, he is when it suits his plans. Until it gets harder to just pretend ;-)

    Charmaine, thanks hon. What happens, well, that will come in good time!

  4. Very atmospheric, can't wait to read what happens next!

  5. I think she's right about the feelings of those left behind.

  6. Hmmm, they just keep throwing new twists and turns at her. She barely has a moment to think, very effective. Great 8!

  7. This all very intriguing. Well done. Thanks for your help with my sentences.

  8. Wow, sounds like Devorah has a tough choice. It's not that easy to just disappear like that. Wonder if she'll do what Kazimir proposes.

  9. Oh boy...what a decision to have to make. I don't know if she can do it! This is a demon version of the witness protection program? :-) I don't think I could do it...