Sunday, July 27, 2014

Weekend Writing Warriors 7/27/14: It sure looked like you destroyed him!

How did it get to be late July already? I don’t know about you, but I’m not sure I’m quite over last winter :-/ We may have a stormy Sunday morning here in Western New York though that’s great WeWriWa weather :-D Pick some luscious fruit without ever leaving home, because we have some tasty story excerpts right here.

My first-draft story tentatively entitled Night Shift left off HERE with Devorah having belted Kazimir for destroying the demon Thaumiel after Kaz said he wouldn’t. Thaumiel had taunted Devorah with a clue about how her dad died and she wanted him alive so she could find out more. Kaz has returned to human form but he’s weakened, plus he took a dagger in the leg only a few minutes before this part of the scene.

Adrael is the angel liaison Devorah and Kaz have been working with. Collected excerpts for this story are here.
With a loud groan, he rolled away from me then sat up to lean over his thigh, both hands pressed over the dagger wound. “Adrael’s got him,” he wheezed.
“Adrael—what? What do you mean?”
“I didn’t destroy him, angels got him.”
“But the dagger--I saw you!” I dropped to a seat on the cold ground; what game was he trying now?
“Fuck it, I didn’t destroy him, the dagger has to strike his eye to do that.”
“Oh . . .” My cheeks flamed. It sure had looked destructive to me.
Every friendship has misunderstandings ;-) I’m having to re-work the plot so I don’t know how many of these scenes will make it into the next draft, but certainly some will. Thanks so much for your encouragement, it means a lot :-)


  1. Hah! I remember that earlier snippet and I thought there was more going on than met the eye :)

    1. hee hee! Hi Ian. Yes, you picked up on that, good on you! Thanks for stopping by again :D

  2. Wish I could figure out the rules governing this universe.

  3. Poor lil' Kaz...she better give him a sheepish grin : ) Oops! Fun little snippet this week, put a smile on my face Marcia!

  4. Murder and mayhem plus so much more. What a story. Thanks, Marcia.

  5. And it had sure sounded destructive to me too! Really an engrossing story, can't wait for whatever happens next - terrific snippet!

  6. Devorah still has lots to learn. Poor Kaz. But I'd have belted him too, lol. I want to know what happened to her dad. :-) Good continued tension in this story, Marcia. :-)

  7. Every relationship has misunderstandings. I know that wasn't part of the excerpt, but it cracked me up.

  8. I agree with Teresa, a lot to learn. Like the bit of humor at the end with her remark. You have a lot of great world building going on. I could never do it to that extent.
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  9. Ouch, Kaz is hurting for sure. Obviously Devorah has a temper. Curious about the angel and what else he can tell her about her father. Lots of questions, good reason to keep reading.