The scene I’m using for SSS
describes the wedding of Neal’s best friend, Sandy, to Sophie. The entire scene
is in Neal’s POV. During the ceremony Neal had some difficulty
trying not to think about the one-night-stand he and Sophie shared. He had a
harder time with memories of his first love, Laurie, who died before he said
those three little words “I love you.”
April
also grew up in Crescent City. She now lives with Neal in Los Angeles
but still struggles with unrequited feelings for Sandy. The ceremony is
over and Neal suggested
to April that they go for a walk along the beach. Neal thinks about how
content
he is with his relationship with April; they live together but have
never
discussed marriage. He told April
that he
doesn’t want to leave her alone if anything happens to him. She asked
why so many men think the world revolves around them and he protested
that he didn't mean it that way. She winds up in his arms as they stand on the beach. I'm skipping over Neal thinking about how empty he felt after Laurie died, and picking up with him addressing April.
“Are you happy just living with me, or are you pissed that I haven’t asked you to marry me?”
He felt her stiffen in his arms. “You’re not thinking of making a pity proposal, are you?”
“Pity doesn’t have anything to do with it. If getting married means a lot to you, I’ll do it. I don’t want to lose you.”
She laughed then said, “That’s the most lopsided proposal ever!”
Half the fun of SSS is
seeing comments on excerpts of your own work, but the other fun part is seeing
the other snippets. There’s a fair amount of romance in the excerpts though
several are not typical at all! There’s really something to please every
reading taste.
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LOL I agree! But I think it's sweet that he's asking how she feels about it. Maybe he'll do a better job of the actual proposal. :)
ReplyDeleteheehee! Thanks Jessica. It's just not natural for him to be that expressive. :D
DeleteLOL, that IS a lopsided proposal! So this explains the earlier snippets when he's proposing to her on the stage and you'd said she'd turned him down... I really like Neal
ReplyDeleteWow, it's awesome of you to say you like him! He's always embarrassed when somebody says that, but he's smiling too. We both thank you.
DeleteWow, that *is* lopsided. Great dialogue, great six.
ReplyDeleteAppreciate it, Virginia!
DeleteThat Neal is such a confused soul--and he keeps sticking his foot in his mouth while he's figuring out life. :-)
ReplyDeleteNice snippet, Marcia!
I didn't do a six again this week, but thought I'd drop by to see how you're doing with Neal and Sandy. :-)
heehee! Thanks Teresa. The best part is, he comes out like that all by himself. I tweak his dialogue but his voice is all his own.
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