While some of the plot is subject to change (draft two is a
pretty early draft, after all) the basic elements will stay, as will the
character "voices". So these excerpts will still give you a good idea
of how the plot plays out and what the characters are like. The year is 1986,
in Los Angeles, California.
All the previous excerpts are collected here.
After last week’s excerpt, Razor and Sandy talk about a few things. Sandy repeats his offer of cash to help Razor start over in another town and repeats that it’s easy. Except that it’s not. Razor drags Sandy over to the only source of light in the room, burning branches inside a pair of old oil drums. He shows Sandy a small tattoo on his hand and explains:
After last week’s excerpt, Razor and Sandy talk about a few things. Sandy repeats his offer of cash to help Razor start over in another town and repeats that it’s easy. Except that it’s not. Razor drags Sandy over to the only source of light in the room, burning branches inside a pair of old oil drums. He shows Sandy a small tattoo on his hand and explains:
“That’s for la vida loca, the whole gang thing. The ink’s forever, just like Mi Familia.” He pulled his shirt up to show the gang tat above his heart. “Born here, kill here, and be killed here — that’s all there is. If I split, can’t come back ’cause I get a bullet in my head.”The Anglo stared at the tats, then looked him in the eyes. “Somebody once told me that I gave up on her and now she’s dead. I am not letting that happen again.”
Mi Familia is the name of Razor's gang.
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ReplyDeleteDon't exactly know where this is going, but it's got my attention. I love the lingo.
ReplyDeleteThanks Michael. That's a really nice first comment of the day :D
DeleteI'm glad Sandy isn't giving up on his efforts to help Razor, but the entire gang life thing is so complicated, just as your character explains. Very well done snippet!
ReplyDeleteThanks so much. This of course is just the beginning of Razor's struggles, and Sandy's facing some trouble as well.
DeleteGood for Sandy! I like that he isn't giving up.
ReplyDelete'preciate you stopping by, Elaine.
DeleteThis has a coplete ring of authenticity. I can just imagine these two gradually getting to know each other.
ReplyDeleteCool :D That's exactly what I love to hear! Thanks Paula.
DeleteI just had to see what happening with Razor and Sandy. Really enjoying the story! Has a totally authentic ring to it. (Just saw somebody already said that - must be true then. ;-) ) Have a great week! :-)
ReplyDeleteBut it means a lot to get that validation from more than one person! Back @ u Debbie :D
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