Sunday, August 19, 2012

Six Sentence Sunday #17

We're back with more from one of the scenes I wrote because I was in a dry spell for the novel itself. It's not intended to be included in the novel, at least not at this point. This excerpt is part of the scene here on my blog entitled Sandy and Neal before the wedding (Sandy's wedding to Sophie).

This scene started with SSS #14. It takes place several years before Neal proposes to April.

In the scene, Sandy and Neal have traveled to Crescent City, California--Sandy's hometown. Sandy gets up early the morning of the ceremony and asks Neal to come with him to the beach so he can "settle his head." Neal brings his guitar, which he's planning to use at the ceremony (unbeknownst to Sandy). He's just started guitar lessons so he's not very good yet.

At this point, the two guys have been friends for 10 or 11 years. They're in a rock band together. They spend a short while at the beach then go to Frank's Diner, the local gathering spot. Donna's the waitress. The excerpt is in Neal's POV.
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Donna was tempting but after all, April had come on the trip. Dissing the woman who’d stuck by him would be shitty. She claimed she was over Sandy but she’d need extra attention today, and that was not a bad thing. Neal slid out of the booth. “Time to get back, I gotta practice before the service.” Damn, he shouldn’t have said that.
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Thanks for hopping by my blog today. I'll be putting tea on, have a seat :)
Posted by Owllady at 8:30 AM
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6 comments:

  1. AnonymousAugust 19, 2012 at 10:52 AM

    Oops! When trying to concentrate on one thing, other things spill out, LOL! Love Neal!

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  2. Jess SchiraAugust 19, 2012 at 11:15 AM

    For a scene you don't plan to use, it's a lovely peice of writing and does a nice job showing how Neal's mind works. I hope you're able to find a place for it in your novel!

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  3. OwlladyAugust 19, 2012 at 11:22 AM

    Thanks, Angela and Jess. If I make the story into two books, this might fit in. I hear conflicting info on whether or not one should work on a sequel when the first book hasn't found a home yet, but sometimes characters get into so much, you find yourself carried away with them. I appreciate the support on it. :)

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  4. Jessica E. SubjectAugust 19, 2012 at 3:05 PM

    Oops! I'm sure Neal will enjoy it just the same. :)

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  5. Teresa CypherAugust 19, 2012 at 7:51 PM

    Uh oh! Gave it away! April and Sandy were once an item? The plot thickens ;-) It is a good look at how Neal's mind works, Marcia. Nice six.

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  6. OwlladyAugust 20, 2012 at 7:19 PM

    Hi ladies. It doesn't really come out in the scene anywhere, but April's a victim of unrequited love. Sandy had another girlfriend and April didn't tell him how she felt until years later. And by then, he was with Sophie, so April knew it was never going anywhere. It took her a while to warm up to Neal.Love doesn't run smoothly, after all!

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