tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1361240553573022287.post4368032105906103510..comments2023-03-29T08:47:59.677-04:00Comments on Letter Go: Weekend Writing Warriors 5/25/14: the weight of utter hopelessnessOwlladyhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/12989152304836466124noreply@blogger.comBlogger11125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1361240553573022287.post-24963273575427520312014-05-27T22:11:16.197-04:002014-05-27T22:11:16.197-04:00Thanks, folks. I love getting reader reactions. Th...Thanks, folks. I love getting reader reactions. The Memorial Day weekend kind of messed up my visiting schedule but I'm hopping around this evening :)Marciahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07092928480361131154noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1361240553573022287.post-89179443310825999832014-05-26T22:48:40.871-04:002014-05-26T22:48:40.871-04:00Very scary visual. Nicely done.Very scary visual. Nicely done.Chelle Corderohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15412268726863698528noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1361240553573022287.post-77224329220413395612014-05-26T01:57:36.649-04:002014-05-26T01:57:36.649-04:00Scary.Scary.Sue Ann Bowlinghttp://homecomingbook.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1361240553573022287.post-89777463774167588652014-05-26T00:46:36.342-04:002014-05-26T00:46:36.342-04:00Holy wow! I think I'd be staining my panties....Holy wow! I think I'd be staining my panties...how the heck is she going to get out of this? Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05551671528722336812noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1361240553573022287.post-40747275030936296882014-05-25T14:34:48.673-04:002014-05-25T14:34:48.673-04:00That's pretty scary. Nicely done. I forgot to ...That's pretty scary. Nicely done. I forgot to sign up, but you can see my sentences at http://www.elaienpcantrell.blogspot.comElaine Cantrellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05668294337075373288noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1361240553573022287.post-47220128455404542362014-05-25T13:04:44.368-04:002014-05-25T13:04:44.368-04:00You've painted an intense frightening moment f...You've painted an intense frightening moment from which there's no possible escape unless. . .A tune in next week invitation, thank you very much.Charmaine Gordonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15236373312231763983noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1361240553573022287.post-13346060615687604092014-05-25T11:10:16.630-04:002014-05-25T11:10:16.630-04:00Oh, you'd need to change "brush" to ...Oh, you'd need to change "brush" to "brushing". :-)Teresa Cypherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08940430996766842518noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1361240553573022287.post-3697408052300354462014-05-25T11:06:43.453-04:002014-05-25T11:06:43.453-04:00Great description! This was absolutely visceral: &...Great description! This was absolutely visceral: " Almighty God, please help me!"<br /><br />One suggestion (ignore at will :-) ) The first sentence, I'm reading cause/effect confusion. I'd drop the "to" and place a comma there. Changing the syntax ever so subtly changes the focus of the sentence. As it is, it seems that needing to touch the ceiling is the cause of Teresa Cypherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08940430996766842518noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1361240553573022287.post-45202049113528324512014-05-25T10:48:02.155-04:002014-05-25T10:48:02.155-04:00Ooh, TENSE! And foreboding. She's going to nee...Ooh, TENSE! And foreboding. She's going to need all her strength to fight...really an excellent excerpt. This is such a fascinating story you've got going on...Veronica Scotthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04732940088047026021noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1361240553573022287.post-33985679762302840382014-05-25T10:22:05.149-04:002014-05-25T10:22:05.149-04:00aww thanks Jess, much appreciated! I've learne...aww thanks Jess, much appreciated! I've learned a valuable lesson from my two novel WIPs--I can't "pants" a writing project. No, I write myself into hedge mazes that way. lol! Marciahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07092928480361131154noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1361240553573022287.post-70097424727150736522014-05-25T08:53:34.774-04:002014-05-25T08:53:34.774-04:00This certainly doesn't read like a 1st draft. ...This certainly doesn't read like a 1st draft. The writing is so smooth. Good luck resolving your plot issues.Jess Schirahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04930756756945812094noreply@blogger.com